“The desire to write grows with writing.”
-Desiderius Erasmus
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I finished the first Campaigner Challenge. It started out one way and then evolved into this story. I think it’s decent, considering it’s only 200 words (EXACTLY, according to Word’s word count). I’m not used to writing things this short, so hopefully people enjoy it! (Like it? You can vote here. I’m entry #318)
BIRTHDAY NIGHT
The door swung open after I had closed it. Jared followed me into my house. What he did was bad enough, but now he had to invade my home?
“Can we talk, Kaley?” He asked.
This was supposed to be a nice birthday dinner and celebration of our three-year dating anniversary. He had to go and ruin it.
“By ‘talk’ do you mean ‘go behind my back’?” I let down my hair.
“I thought I was doing something you’d appreciate.”
“You threw out my Snuggie.”
“It was dry rotting.”
“You still don’t throw out someone else’s stuff!” I turned around and walked into the kitchen.
I heard Jared leave the house and come back with a wrapped box. “I’m sorry,” he said. “I shouldn’t have thrown it out.” He offered me the gift.
I glared at him and took it. I opened it and saw that a brand new Snuggie was inside. I turned my face from him as I removed it from the box. A lump rose in my throat when I read the love note embroidered onto the Snuggie.
“There’s something else,” he said.
I turned around, and Jared was on one knee, holding a much smaller box.
That brought tears to my eyes! What a sweet little story! Terrific!
Aww, thanks, Ruth. So glad you enjoyed it.
Aw, sweet! What a great little twist from being SUCH a silly argument to a great romantic gesture. Well done. Good luck with the story and the Campaign!
Thanks, Wendy. Yeah, it was a silly argument; I originally had it more of a “fight,” but it seems this version worked well. 🙂
On another, yet related (Campaign) note, you’ve been tagged, my friend. 🙂
http://wbterrien.com/2011/09/13/tag-10-random-things-about-me/
Very nice, I’ve had situations like that *foot in mouth* and red faced! Lol! Love the ending! ; )
Haha, I think we’ve all had those foot in mouth moments before. Thanks for the kind words, Sheri!
Yes, you made me laugh. With all of the ominous doors swinging rampantly through this challenge, it was great to chuckle over the snuggie. I LOVE my snuggie, by the way.
Hahah, great! Glad I could make you chuckle… Honestly, I couldn’t think of another object other than a Snuggie (which came to mind because my sister likes hers so much, lol). And the deadline was approaching, so I had to just run with it.
Awww. How sweet!
Thanks!
Ahh how romantic. Nicely done. Mine is #72
Thanks.
What a sweetheart. Lovely heart warming story. Really enjoyed it.
Thanks, Ann. I’m glad you enjoyed it.
Hi there,
Fellow campaigner paying you a return visit.
What a sweet story!
Claire
Thanks, Claire.
I love the last line! It sounds like it’s an even bigger surprise for Kaley.
My entry.
Thanks! 🙂 I’m amazed at how many people enjoyed this story. I mean, I put thought into it, but I’ve tried writing a flash fiction piece in the past (at 1,000 words) and that story still isn’t working. So for this 200-word story to receive praises is a pleasant surprise. Thanks, everyone!
You don’t know how much his story makes me laugh because my husband bought himself a UT (we live in TN) Snuggie, and he looks like a deranged monk! I love how you really made the MC believable, too. Oh, the stupid things us women say to stick our foot in our mouth before knowing the whole story!
I enjoyed it enough to say “Aw!” out loud. 😉 Great ending.
Very cute! With a nice twist. 🙂
Very sweet
This is lovely. I have tears in my eyes! Well done.
Awwww!! Lol! Open mouth, insert foot. 😉
I think it’s great to S.C. Loved the small box gift! Speaking of gifts…I have nominated you for the Versatile Blogger Award. See my blog for details and Congratulations! 🙂
Yeah, that was fun, thanks for sharing in the Campaign challenge! I’d have enjoyed reading the bit with a bigger fight, but probably not in 200 words.
My favorite line was “By ‘talk’ do you mean ‘go behind my back’?”
Oh, I wish I had made it around in time to vote. I liked this a lot – seems so serious to start, and then with the mention of the Snuggie the mood instantly lightens. And a very satisfying ending. Well done!
Cute story. Not familiar with the Campaigner Challenge, but it sounds neat-o. (Somehow, the word seemed to fit. I’m sticking with it.)
Also glad to hear you’ve got a dog in the WotF fight. Good luck.