“What a writer brings to any story is an attitude.”
-John Gregory Dunne
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Science Fiction & Fantasy Saturday is…a web ring of authors who post snippets of their work for comment. In reality, it’s a close-knit group of friends and colleagues working together to support and encourage one another and promote the science fiction and fantasy genres. I am just one author in the midst of awesome authors. To read other snippets, or learn how to join us, visit scififansat.blogspot.com!
This week I am sharing another snippet from my short story, Acts. Acts is published in Villipede Publications‘ sci-fi anthology, The Glass Parachute (available to purchase at Amazon). To read the first snippet, click here.
To help set the scene, as I skipped some paragraphs from the first snippet to this one: On Nobile, the social status is based on whatever color band a Nobilian has showing beneath their wrist. There are seven colors, and those with less desirable colors often refer to those with better social standings as “Upper-Bloods.”
Oh. And if you don’t read the first snippet, Westin and Tammi are talking through communicators affixed inside their ears.
“We’ll be free of these Upper-Bloods and the entire Nobility Act nonsense soon enough,” Westin said.
Tammi stepped carefully down the steps, holding onto the gold-plated hand railing. On her way, she spotted Westin in the crowd. His black, slicked back hair was a standout amongst the array of vibrant hair colors.
Then a freckled face in the crowd drew Tammi’s attention. It was more the length of his bright green hair he wore in a ponytail that made him noticeable. Very few Nobilian men fashioned their hair with length. But it looked good on this gentleman; worked well with his round face.
“Jasen’s coming your way,” she whispered.
“I see him,” Westin said.
I hope you enjoyed this snippet! And be sure to check out other snippets by the other authors at scififansat.blogspot.com.
The gold-plated hand railing is a nice touch. I also like the character descriptions.
Thanks! I appreciate it! 🙂
Great details in this–very visual!
Wow, thanks, Lyndi! Descriptions and such was something I consciously had to work on because I can write dialogue many times faster… You should see my first drafts. lol! So I appreciate those words. 🙂
Enjoying the detail, but I *am* a sucker for action… 🙂
Thanks! And I’ll see what I can do. 😉 There actually is a fight scene later in the story…
I’m enjoying this look at Nobile. I love stories of brewing revolution. Nice detail!
Thanks, Leslie!
I liked the line “Very few Nobilian men wore their hair with length”. It suited and helped define the character -accentuated by the gold painted detail to help paint the picture. Also a quick build of suspense with the crowd and Jasen – friend or for – I guess we’ll find out!
Haha, yes you will! Thanks for your comments!
Nice attention to detail! I liked that you firmly established the scope of the society in just a few sentences.
Thanks, Patrick!
I’m still not clear whether the hair color and the color bannd on the wrist are inherited or applied.
The hair color is natural; the bands in the wrist are surgically added. Thanks for stopping by!
Very nice! Interesting tidbits of worldbuilding. Makes me want to check out the whole thing!
Wow! Thanks!
How cool is this? A peek into another world/culture, and done in a way that it’s observed as if in passing, yet descriptive enough to know you’re not on ‘Earth’ anymore. Good stuff.
Thank you, T.K.!